I like and prefer “good guy”, “hero” stories, especially when the assholes get what they deserve. Indianporn Most were wrong words being used and some were sentences with words out of order and of course the most noticeable is the giant block of text which in itself is a pain to try and read even without having to try and decipher and figure out every lines screw ups. 4 s«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 20:02:10Nice story despite misspellings. Not a great attempt for a first try plenty of room for improving.«1» 4 s«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 20:02:10Nice story despite misspellings. Wish there was more description in the beatings the assholes got and the after effects and reactions of others at the party, but maybe you’ll give us more in your next attempt.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 12:21:29While I applaud your effort. Wall of text makes it hard to read.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 16:44:58spell check, smaller paragraphs.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 15:18:31Always re-read your own stories before posting, I suggest reading them out loud to yourself, as this will reveal a
