Best of luck!READERReport 2005-09-26 11:18:28Well, now we have the titmans perspective. a good quicky is good every once in a while. Indianporn All in all an OK story, for a 16 yo.READERReport 2005-09-26 04:56:29where in the world did this “writer” learn English? It ruined the story totally. In China? I’m sure you can think up some great stuff. … terrible grammar; terrible sentence structure and spelling. Work on characterization, plot development and descriptive language. Work on characterization, plot development and descriptive language. All in all an OK story, for a 16 yo.READERReport 2005-09-26 04:56:29where in the world did this “writer” learn English? The language was average (please never ever say ‘love tunnel’ again), the structure was OK, the plot left a little to be desired. Better yet, devote more time to your next story. terrible grammar; terrible sentence structure and spelling. How in the world could anybodsy say this was a good story???READERReport 2005-09-25 23:01:45Good, hot and fast. keep them cummmmming.READERReport 2005-09-27 12:38:00Archaic sums it up fairly well.
