Maybe try typing story into microsoft word then compy and paste.Anonymous readerReport 2009-12-04 01:46:48poorly written, and completely unbelievable. I found it hard to go with this story when I couldn’t decide what she looked like with the so little description you gave. Indian sex passable. i know im a rough critic. passable. i know im a rough critic. 9 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-04 02:12:03Other than such comments mentioned I think you need to work on character design, ok we get it the girl is goth and she is wearing a nice dress, what does she look like? What did the dress look like? love rape and bestialityAnonymous readerReport 2009-12-05 04:30:54good plot, but work on your formatting. but im probably one of the only ones.«12» Hair color and/or style? 5/10anonymous readerReport 2010-10-01 19:00:05whats up with the name andrea in both of your stories?Hungstud69Report 2009-12-08 17:00:48Great story! 5/10anonymous readerReport 2010-10-01 19:00:05whats up with the name andrea in both of your stories?Hungstud69Report 2009-12-08 17:00:48Great story!
