You got me a bit confused in the middle and you weren’t very creative with the character descriptions. Indian xxx good story :)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-18 10:23:29That was a great beginning to a great story! Tell us about his eyes, his lips, skin tone, be vivid when describing. good story :)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-18 10:23:29That was a great beginning to a great story! good story :)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-18 10:23:29That was a great beginning to a great story! good story :)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-18 10:23:29That was a great beginning to a great story! good story :)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-18 10:23:29That was a great beginning to a great story! Please tell us more about Greg and Lukas!anonymous readerReport 2013-05-22 11:11:37This pstiong knocked my socks offanonymous readerReport 2013-05-18 20:21:53it wont let me continue, i wrote the next part, and it shut down my accountanonymous readerReport 2013-05-18 18:13:02HA GAAAAAAY! good story :)anonymous readerReport 2013-05-18 10:23:29That was a great beginning to a great story! You got me a bit confused in the middle and you weren’t very creative with the character descriptions.
