What I did read was okay but I had to stop because it was just too hard to ignore all the little stuff. Better luck next time.«12» You need to use apostrophes. Indianporn hah and again…paragraphsReport 2008-08-31 00:42:33paragraphs pleasefbaileyReport 2008-08-30 12:44:59You really need to use a spell checker and then you need to proofread your work before submitting it. its a good story I liked it.Report 2008-09-01 13:36:15waaaaaaaaay toooooooooooo shoooooooorrrrrrrttttt!!!!!!!Report 2008-08-31 22:21:19build up to it a little bit more…it seemed like one minute you had neighbors and next you were giving a blowjob? And as everyone else has told you, you need to use paragraphs too. The letter i needs to be capitalized. Better luck next time.«12» 6 s«12»Report 2008-09-01 22:06:45the plot is nice but I think u r missing details ! You need to use apostrophes. Better luck next time.«12» The letter i needs to be capitalized.
