Men can’t have mutiple orgams, like some women are capable of. also, a character description lets people picture your story more vividly. Indian sex in the end, it makes it a lot hotter for the reader. With training we can learn to stay hard even after we cum, and keep it that way for a while, some even long enough for them to get “naturally” hard again. in the end, it makes it a lot hotter for the reader. But it’s a nice try. Also character descriptions would probably be a good idea, it doesn’t have to be: “5’5″ tall, 130 pounds, blue eyes, etc” but some kind of description would be nice, maybe just work it into the story. I wish you luck in your future attempts at writing :)anonymous readerReport 2012-08-21 20:56:58no begining a rush to sex and no end equal a WASTE OF TIME do a total rewrite and use a good editor.chance52Report 2012-07-10 18:52:17much like everyone else said, you’re story does need some build up to
