If it’s only a fantasy story, make yourself taller, change the daughter’s name to Mindy or Wendy, explain what is wrong with your son (ie Bi-polar or ??)
Not a BAD story – just needs some improvement.anonymous readerReport 2012-08-11 02:18:40For the most part it’s a decent story from what I read but could be better. Indianporn J.A.G«1» From what I read I would give it a 7.6 out of 10. Keep going at it, just try and edit the background of the story as well as the way you word your words. Break down the sentences into manageable chunks. Yours Truly. Very long diatribes bore most people shitless, and bored people can be less than complimentary in their assessments of your writing style. From what I read I would give it a 7.6 out of 10. J.A.G«1» From what I read I would give it a 7.6 out of 10. Very long diatribes bore most people shitless, and bored people can be less than complimentary in their assessments of
