It COULD get higher reviews if you do as I suggest since you won’t chase people away from reading poorly written story all due to format and not SO MUCH poor content.anonymous readerReport 2013-02-07 11:09:52opened the story to read, but didn’t even try to read it. It reads as if you either don’t known English (or Grammar) or that you were in too much of a hurry to post this. Indian xxx It reads as if you either don’t known English (or Grammar) or that you were in too much of a hurry to post this. Much obliged.animal99Report 2013-02-18 14:32:31After all, your later stories are REALLY good to read.animal99Report 2013-02-18 14:31:39You really should re-post this after you do some proof-reading and break up the story into paragraphs. It COULD get higher reviews if you do as I suggest since you won’t chase people away from reading poorly written story all due to format and not SO MUCH poor content.anonymous readerReport 2013-02-07 11:09:52opened the story to read, but didn’t even try to read
