Well written though«1» You need to capitalize new sentences. I give it an 7/10 because it was very undescripted sex scene. Indian xxx 3 comments«1»tanya WriterReport 2013-06-24 05:48:53A good idea for the story, but you have run on sentences. You need to capitalize new sentences. I give it an 7/10 because it was very undescripted sex scene. I give it an 7/10 because it was very undescripted sex scene. You need to capitalize new sentences. You need to capitalize new sentences. I give it an 7/10 because it was very undescripted sex scene. Ad good editor could help you.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-11 21:47:33Im an old er guy an need it badanonymous readerReport 2013-05-09 16:19:58Great story! You need to capitalize new sentences. Well written though«1» Ad good editor could help you.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-11 21:47:33Im an old er guy an need it badanonymous readerReport 2013-05-09 16:19:58Great story! Well written though«1» Well written though«1» 3 comments«1»tanya WriterReport 2013-06-24 05:48:53A good idea for the story, but you have run on sentences.
